A little bit of everything in one pot.
Oh this is so good! "sun-struck sky", the salting of foreign words, and the ending just the right touch. One nit:"unutsi is artthat never pointsin (fewer) than six directions"I would use "less" instead. Just my 2 cents to take or leave. Thanks for posting this, really enjoyed!
Lovely! I particularly enjoyed the icicly, kind of declarative pause I found myself on as I began these lines:the sharpest airholds little water;expect few crystals,faux neigeYou are incredible. Thank you!!!
I was so enjoying the mystery (because I'm a little language dense) and the slow shiver of beautiful phrases when my face broke into a full grin at "drive where you like." You, I believe, may be developing a inner, ancient Yankeeness. Thanks for the colorful whiteness. And again, a perfect jewel of a title! <3, fmf
Thanks for your comments! I'm glad it was a hit because it's hard for me to write anything without characters-- although, I guess I did slip in that grandma at the end. :)Marie, I'm still weighing my fewer/less options. I like the sound of "less," but I'm stuck on the grammar.
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